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Hey there, I'll be grading your stuff this time. My comment are in this color.
I noticed you have 5 D Rank spells, so I'll need you to either buy a D Rank spell slot from the magic shop, or get rid of one of the spells you currently have on the application. The existing rules allow all D Rank players to start with 4 spell slots.
Spell slots as you rank up:
D Rank - 4 D Rank
C Rank - 4 D Rank, 1 D Rank Signature, 3 C Rank, 1 C Rank Signature
B Rank - 4 D Rank, 1 D Rank Signature, 3 C Rank, 3 B Rank, 1 B Rank Signature
A Rank - 4 D Rank, 1 D Rank Signature, 3 C Rank, 3 B Rank, 3 A Rank, 1 A Rank Signature
S Rank - 4 D Rank, 1 D Rank Signature, 3 C Rank, 3 B Rank, 3 A Rank, 2 S Rank, 1 S Rank Signature
(In case you're wondering about that Signature spell, the C Rank signature increases with your rank up to S Rank; the D Rank signature stays as a D Rank signature.)
I noticed you have 5 D Rank spells, so I'll need you to either buy a D Rank spell slot from the magic shop, or get rid of one of the spells you currently have on the application. The existing rules allow all D Rank players to start with 4 spell slots.
Spell slots as you rank up:
D Rank - 4 D Rank
C Rank - 4 D Rank, 1 D Rank Signature, 3 C Rank, 1 C Rank Signature
B Rank - 4 D Rank, 1 D Rank Signature, 3 C Rank, 3 B Rank, 1 B Rank Signature
A Rank - 4 D Rank, 1 D Rank Signature, 3 C Rank, 3 B Rank, 3 A Rank, 1 A Rank Signature
S Rank - 4 D Rank, 1 D Rank Signature, 3 C Rank, 3 B Rank, 3 A Rank, 2 S Rank, 1 S Rank Signature
(In case you're wondering about that Signature spell, the C Rank signature increases with your rank up to S Rank; the D Rank signature stays as a D Rank signature.)
IcyQueen1 wrote:Magic
Primary Magic: Past Magic
Secondary Magic:
Caster or Holder: Holder
Description: Many think her magic as going into the past of time, but her magic is known more as manipulating reality itself, she goes into the thoughts and past off things she cuts even a object had a past even if it's not living it still has a history on how it is now in the present, the way it was made built and even after, even how it was damaged by someone kicking it or destroying it.
The magic is known about how she manipulates reality making it like she was there in the past, she can set up trapping someone setting something up from five years ago, the true power of her magic is something that most fear and that is called Replacement, if someone has really an important figure in their life, a role model, lover, even their own family she is able to replace that person with herself making them think she was there mother or sister even their teacher and how they learned their spells, she will know everything about them from using her magic, all their spells the way they will attack, they would have to fight in a new way for Sylvia not to know what is next.
Her magic will no longer work if she is not in the field of sight of the object or person having the reality of the past changed back to before she was there. The way she uses her magic is within her sword by slashing or cutting object's or people she is able to jump into the past, changing it into her liking making a wall no longer broken or destroying it in the past making it no longer there in the present. By slashing someone she can even change what happen to their body in the past, cuts, scars losing a hand can be undone by going into their past she can make sure that event never happen.
But she can't take things to the past with her that she carries only her sword, she wouldn't be able to make a wall as she doesn't have the tools but she is able to go into a walls past making sure it was not destroyed, but she would be able to make a pit trap as it she could have made a hole for someone fall into digging a hole.
Strengths:
The strength of the magic is making something think twice about attacking her, would you attack your own mother or sister without feeling anything many wouldn't even try attacking them.
Knowledge of cutting someone she is able to know the truth about them, their history from their best friend to favorite food, and how they learned their spells with her knowing them all leaving no surprises unless they change the way they fight.
Weaknesses:
She has to be in the range of the person/object in their range of vision, once the person has no way of seeing her her magic will stop this applies to both people and objects she has cut.
The big weakness of using this magic is when fighting a person she has to hit the skin, if she hits someone's clothes or anything else over there body her magic will not work at all, this only applies to people.
One big weakness in her magic is one she tries to keep secret if someone reflection's the image with a mirror or even water the object and even person will go back to how they once were, with the person they will no longer think of Sylvia as someone close to them with reality changing back.
Lineage:
- Blessed by the Fourth Wall:
Description: The ancestor in here could have turned into a god, but nooooo, he had to preserve the fabric of reality or something. For this lineage, this ancestor, known as the One Who Got Close, is the only one to have found the Fourth Wall of the world, giving himself the chance to break it and ascend to the heights that are unknown, basically, us. However, when told by the wall that breaking it would sacrifice everyone else in the world, the noble goody-two-shoes chose to stop himself instead and as a result, he was blessed by the Fourth Wall. This blessing would go down to his bloodline and now you, oh lucky guy, are one of his kin.
Ability: The Fourth Wall respects the user's bloodline and has given those of it the Glimpse, the ability to see what the user should not be able to see. Of course, to respect the purpose of the Fourth Wall, the user can only see one "Thing" at a time. Such as a snippet from a magic or character app (See 2 strengths or 2 weaknesses, see 2 likes or 2 dislikes, and so on.), or from another post to know someone is for example pursuing them or that someone is going to make a certain attack on them within the current post.
Usage: 5 post cooldown between uses.
Unique Abilities:
- Changing The Past:
By changing an object's past, she is able to make like it was no longer there by destroying it ten years ago or she could do the same for fixing a broken wall. By slashing the ground, she would be able to set a pit hole or any other type of traps, by manipulating a false memory into the ground making ten years ago, she can also trap someone behind building many walls using her magic so she made them in the past. But she can't take things to the past with her that she carries only her sword, she wouldn't be able to make a wall as she doesn't have the tools but she is able to go into a walls past making sure it was not destroyed, but she would be able to make a pit trap as it she could have made a hole for someone fall into digging a hole.
- Knowledge:
I'm not sure how familiar you are with this site, but anyone would tell you that during jobs it's 100% okay to stretch the power of your magic. There's some people who use D Rank spells to 1-shot H Rank bosses, though they normally have a really good reason why it happened. We value the story more than the statistics, but for PvP we still have to make it fair.
If they had something to eat yesterday she would know it, if they were happy or sad ten years ago she would know. It is not one thing she will not know about that person she will be able to know like she was there.
- Controlling Mind's:
- D-Rank:
Name: Past Refreshing
Rank: D
Type: Supportive.
Duration: 3
Cooldown: 4
Description: Time itself is a powerful thing and changing the past has lots of power behind it. By slashing her sword at someone who has cuts or bruises and is weakened from the battle of losing magic power, by slashing them, she is able to go into that person's past to the time they got hurt, returning some of their strength their speed will have a 50% increase to speed feeling like they have no damage at all. Gonna ask you to lower this to 25% increase please.
Strengths:
Can make someone feel refreshed with small cuts and bruises going from there body.
Weaknesses:
After the time is up from using the spell the person will feel all the pain that was removed and if they have any new cuts or bruises could end up making them feel worse from all the damaged added together.
The spell can only work on the person once each post, after she has used her spell for the Roleplay him/her it will not work again for them, in till they start a new roleplay.
Name: Past Rebuild
Rank: D
Type: Defensive
Duration: 2
Cooldown: 3
Description: She is able to fix object's in the past using them as a means of defense if any type of wall or anything that is broken around her she will slash at it with her sword making it back into a whole object again, a broken wall will be fixed, or the whole wall will could become so it was not made, allowing for her to get away from enemy. This is able to block D Rank Magic spells. You can increase the effect to block 2x D Rank spells OR 1x C Rank spell.
Strengths:
The big Strength of this spell is making a fast defense or to get away from someone.
Weaknesses:
Has to some type of object to use it on, if it's no trace of a wall or anything that is broken or whole the spell is unable to work as it can't make something out from nothing.
Her sword must slash the object that she wishes to change the past of it.
Name: Past Hole
Rank: D
Type: Offensive
Duration: 2
Cooldown: 3
Description: When she puts her sword half way into the ground she is able to go into the past of the ground setting up a pit whole that can make someone fall inside when they step upon, this will slow them down by -20% speed making it easier for her to attack or-or get away. You can increase that to 30% if you'd like.
Strengths:
Is able to trap people inside a small pit whole she is able to trap them inside where they would need to climb out or use some type of magic.
Weaknesses:
The spell can only be used on grass or a dirty but yet solid type of ground that she would be allowed to dig into the past on.
Her sword has to go half the way into the ground she wishes to make a pit trap to use the spell.
Name: Weapons Of The Past
Rank: D
Type: Supportive, Offensive
Duration: 2 I advise reducing this to 1 post
Cooldown: 3
Description: By hitting someone's weapon or tool she is able to go into the past thoughts that it was broken by doing so she can change the events from happening to fix it. Regardless of the effect of the spell (whether you use my suggested version or not) I can only allow it to effect weapons of equal or lesser rank. In this case, Weak weapons/armour is equal to D Rank. So this spell can only work on weak weapons/armour.
That said I have an advised edit for this spell.
"By hitting someone's weapon or tool, she is able to go into the past thoughts of that item and either cause it to shatter, or if the item is broken she can fix it. This only works on Weak Rank equipment."
Strengths:
Is able to destroy or fix the weapons of the people
Weaknesses:
Can not fix the same weapon twice in the same roleplay.
If the weapon is stronger and she's she will not be able to destroy it. The purpose of the spell is to fix weapons, so it wouldn't be able to be used to break it at all... (unless you use my advised version)
Name: Sword of the past
Rank: D
Type: Offensive, Defensive, Supportive.)
Duration: 2
Cooldown: 3
Description: This does D rank damage to the person she hits, when she slashes someone with her sword and hits them they will get a normal cut but it happen 5 minutes again within the past not just now. So... my advise is for this spell to deal D Rank damage as well as normal armed melee damage when she hits the target. Additionally, for 2MP, the next post she can make the cut re-live the experience of being opened to deal ANOTHER hit of D Rank damage but this time it's only the magic damage alone.
Strengths:
Can make the wound worse from a normal cut as time has all gone past with the wound fully open.
Weaknesses:
She has to hit them for this to work.
If they reflect the wound on a mirror or water the wound will be gone.
