Saizo Wolfbane

Name: Saizo Wolfbane
Gender: Male
Age: 18
Birthday: 05/08
Sexuality: Straight
Special Characteristics:

Personality: Saizo seem care-free, kind and clam on the surface. But on the inside he is very serious and stubborn. During battle he will never back down from a strong opponents. He is very protective of his friends. He views them as his family since his only family was his grandfather, who raised him and trained in magic. He is willing give his life for his friends and guild. When he is around a beautiful woman. He becomes dopey, clumsy idiot, who tries to hard to look cool. As a leader he is very observant and decisive on actions he will take.

Likes:

-He like play his grandfather's flute, because it reminds him of his grandfather.

-He likes relax under a shady tree and write in his journal.

Dislikes:

-He dislike arrogant and cruel people.

-He dislikes losing anything.

Motivations:

-To find the wizard, who killed his grandfather and destroyed his grandfather's guild.

-To become one of the strongest wizards in Fiore.

Fears:

-His biggest fear is find his entire guild destroyed and he could not do anything about it.

-He become paralyzed when he is completely surrounded by huge flame. It reminds him of the day he found his grandfather dead.

General Appearance

Saizo:

Height: 5'11"
Weight: 178
Hair: Mid-cut black
Eyes: Indigo
Skin Tone: Fair
Appearance: Saizo is fair complexion man. He has a slender but athletic build. He usually wear navy blue sleeveless shirt w/ black vest, black pants w/ sub-spenders hang to side of his pants and black boots.

Guild/Council

Guild: Eclipse Soul
Tattoo: Right shoulder blade/ blue
Rank: D

Even though this is a WIP i want to point out a few things i see wrong just to help.
1: Your grammar. You use words in the wrong tense which throws off the sentence, you leave out words that need to be in some sentences, and you do not really seem to know how to connect two sentences together that could go together. Like when you are talking about him being protective of his friends, and the reason why. A semi-colon could go well with connecting those two sentences.

2: Appearance. I just want you to know you need text as well, again I know it is a WIP but I do not want to see that left out, actually try to explain his appearance.

3: I want you to try and get more into detail with his personality; you say he loses all self control, well what does that exactly mean in terms of what does he do? People lose self-control in different ways, and I do not like vague, generic, terms. That is just an example so you know how in depth I want you to go.

I hope you end up making this look great. Message me or another mod if you need more help or when you are done.

Fixed

Everything's ok. Just the rank. You have to apply for that and the mods in charge of that are rarely on. So do you wanna remain as B or go to D?

I'll go down to D rank.

Ok. Once youve changed it bump.

Bump

Approved. You can now proceed to magic application. :ego1: