Angel Noche: a spark of wild fire

Angel's story

Angel was the baby of 4 siblings.She had 3 older brothers and 2 protected and loved her very much, 1 did not. The second youngest of the siblings grew tired of being good and slowly and quietly began to turn evil. As angel grew up her brothers trained her and cared for her. They often took her to lily gardens for her to play in and always showed her new things.They loved her so much they had even helped her plant a garden full of flowers she had picked herself. Her oldest brother always looked out for her after her making sure she was well taken care of, he was basically her parent. The second always showed her new things in the world. Everything she knew about nature and how to care for things, he taught. Her third brother always seemed to get her into trouble and, eventally, he saw potential for her to be evil. One night her third brother woke her up and took her to her siblings room.
There he attacked her brothers. They tried to fight back but over the years the youngest of the brothers became extremely powerful.It took him no time at all to kill the two eldest siblings.He turned to her and tried to grab her.Her instincts, from the years of training, kicked in and she was able to wound him so she could run. She was able to run out of his reach but he grabbed her and tried to kill her. He sliced her back and tried to rip off her right arm.It didn't take long for her vision to fade into complete darkness. He left her there to die alone.
She woke up the next morning and realized what had happened. As she walked back to her home she expected to see her brothers cleaning up the mess her youngest brother made. What she found was her brothers bodies laying on the floor in the same spots as when they were slain. She realized then that she was completely alone in the world. Her comfortable loving home was gone and she had to find a new life. She buried her brothers bodies right next to the garden they helped plant years before. She grabbed only a few belongings of hers and her now passed brothers and burned the rest down with the house. She left after only embers remained and went into hiding, afraid that her brother will find her and finish what he started

Is this it? I suggest you build up on the personality, likes, dislikes, motivations, and fears. Include and focus on the "How" and the "Why".

but thats all there is to her

You can explain why she likes certain things, why she fears certain things, etc. And for personality, you can explain how she acts as a leader and as a follower.

better?

...Well you're missing guild info. And, other than that, I'm not sure. Wait for Cloud, Sei, Zeno, or some other mod/admin to decide.

Xana are you a mod? If not I will takeover, if you are i apologise for my intrusion.

Oh no. I'm just helping her out.

The background and character app should be separated.

thank you zeno =)
and maximus what do you think about it?

With separated I meant in two different applications.
The character application goes into the general character registration section.
The background / history goes here.

oh! ok then