[Approved] Yang Black

Name: Yang Black
Gender: Female
Age: 16
Birthday: December 12
Sexuality: Straight
Special Characteristics: When she turns into her dark mode she grows white hair and her eyes turn red.

Personality: She is very calm and quiet and doesn't like to talk unless she needs to or is spoken to(even then if she doesn't like what they say or ask she won't answer) It takes her along time to trust people. She is very cold to some people but when it comes to her friends she will do anything to protect them.Even though many people are scared of her, she is very kind but it is hard for her to show it and not many people see this side of her.
Likes: Tomatoes, Snow,Being around friends, reading, and night time
Dislikes: Seeing people get hurt , killing, seeing others in pain
Motivations: She wants to get stronger so she can protect those closer, and also to kill the person who killed her family when she was younger
Fears: Seeing her friends die and being alone forever.

General Appearance


Height: 161 cm
Weight: 45.4 kg
Hair: Black and is spiky and almost touches her shoulders
Eyes: Black
Skin Tone: Pale
Appearance: Wears lots of black clothes.Though she normally wears a black shirt with long sleeves and black shorts and black boots. Most of her clothes like her shirts will have skulls, cats or just plain black. She always wears shorts or capris.

Guild/Council

Guild: Fairy Tail
Tattoo: On the side of her fight shoulder, It's black.
Rank: D-Rank

Hi, and thanks for joinng FTRPG. Before I can approve your app, there are some things you need to fix.

First of all, you need to use the proper template. Meaning all the
headings should be bolded, so they stand out. The template can be found here. Just click on the spoiler text, copy the code into your post, and edit it accordingly.

Secondly, could you please fix your grammar, punctuation, spelling, and spacing? The most obvious spacing issue is the fact there are no spaces between the commas in your 'Likes' and 'Dislikes' section. There are other spacing mistakes as well (such as 'Name:Yang Black' should be 'Name: Yang Black')

Your 'Appearance' needs to be longer and more descriptive. Adding more to your 'Personality' wouldn't hurt, either.

Please specify what color your guild tattoo is.

Oh, don't forget to fill out the 'Motivation' section! I don't know if you forgot it, or if you didn't finish, but in case you forgot, I'm reminding you.

Once you've fixed these issues, bump the topic and I'll gladly look over it again. If there are no issues, I'll approve it. If there are still some things that need to be fixed, I'll let you know. ^^

Ok..I fixed it,is it any better?

It's a lot better, however, you still haven't fixed all of the spacing issues. There should be a space after every comma, before the next word.
Example: "Tomatoes,Snow" should be "Tomatoes, Snow", etc. ^^

There should also be a space after every period. (I see a couple instances in your 'Personality' where you don't do that).

Sorry if I sound harsh. I'm kind of a perfectionist when it comes to RPing. ^^;

Nah its fine but I hope I got it right this time ^^

Kyou Approves. ^^