Heero's magic apps

Ωmega wrote:Why would it effect all diseases the same? Some , Like god and demon, are the most potent and dangerous kinds. If your immunity drops a normal toxin to 50%, it wouldn't to those.

NightDrivenEn7 wrote:Also, the name of the Monkey King is awkward for it is either Wukong or Son Goku; so you gotta be clear which one, cause I did the lineage work with Wukong's information not Son Goku's.

H rank strength in the passive: NO

150 MPH in the passive: NO

Can still use magic while shape shifted: NO

you have Massive strength but not God like strength; you are just very powerful.

80-95 MPH is acceptable.

Why do you have 4 S ranked spells, did you BUY the two extra slots?

Where does the Body Link magic come in? I don't see ANY information about that what so ever, just random Body Link spells; further more that now makes 5 S rank spells....What the heck?

I want you to give me a list in the comment just HOW many Spell Slots total you have for each rank; this seems highly inaccurate. Further more, where is the wind and ice magic from the passive? As well as the animal shape shifting? Those are not just simply ignored and take up PRIMARY spell slots.

Also, next time you move and lock this again after I have came in and made a comment...i will revoke your mod status. I don't care who previously approved of it, nor do I care what you think about me unapproving it for a temporary update; I am in charge of applications, I overrule THEM. Do not try and one up me again, you are a good mod; i am just going over what I see as problems. And this is where I do it; i won't talk to you about it before hand, i will get in here if you are not on at the same time as me.

Primary Magic: Lightning Dragon Slayer
Secondary Magic: Sky Dragon Slayer

Description: Lighting Dragon Slayer magic is the Lost Magic taught to Heero by the Lightning Dragon Zeuslogia.

Strengths: Heero has noticeably insane reflexes, and can catch things that accidentally fall, react to surprises quickly, even catch arrows shot at him without looking with his hearing alone. Lightning is naturally strong against both the Wood and Water elements and will have an accelerated piercing and shattering effect against Wood of 100%, or electrocution effect against Water of 100% .

Heero can coat his body in Lightning in an instant, making his attacks quite painful, and making his strikes against machines, and mechanical objects deal a massive short circuiting effect. Heero can move at about 85,000 MPS through for short periods of time through his magic or for extended periods of time with Lightning Aura if he's allowed to zip around unchecked. The speed of lightning if 3,700 mps(miles per second) not 85,000 mps. Please edit this.

Heero's physical strikes deal massive physical damage as, as his speed is augmented to nearly not being able to see the streak of Lightning that is he, as he jumps out of Lightning Aura or other Lightning Techniques to strike an opponent. Heero's speed is also augmented naturally at most moments through channeling Lightning through his entire being.

Heero also when alerted; naturally increases the amount of electromagnetic impulses his brain sends to his immune system and body and can heal himself from external scrapes & cuts, and slow, fight, and destroy the effects of diseases and poisons through increasing the amounts Electromagnetism impulses emitted from his Brain, and directing them towards his immune system, White Blood Cells, and Red Blood Cells. Giving him somewhat of an improved Healing Factor. He can decrease the duration of any Poison / Venom / Disease effect on himself below his Rank by 50% Increasing his already impressive durability and immune system as a Dragon Slayer even further. This natural resistence is halved against Demon Slayer and God Slayer type Poisons, as Holy Poison and Demonic Poison are extremely potent, even against a Dragon Slayer. This is definitely an ability that you should make. Not a strength. Strengths are things your magic is strong at while your abilities are things your magic can do that aren’t necessarily spells or passive buffs.

Heero can also crack open most mechanical objects or computers, and consume the raw electricity from the object by standing over it / near it and inhaling massive amounts; as the Electricity jumps into his mouth from the cracked item. Malfunctioning and sparking objects / machines may also have the Electricity sucked out of them through the air and into Heero's mouth.

May use a body of water that opponents are standing in / on to electrocute them for 100% more damage than any ability would naturally do. He may also use this effect on an opponent who's soaking wet. May zap an opponent in the middle of Water Magic(s) and cause them to be electrocuted for 100% damage more than any ability would naturally do.

Weaknesses: Heero has innate weaknesses to the Wind Element which can redirect and push lightning away or back at Heero. Wind Magics of equal or higher rank will cause his Lightning spells to go haywire; and fizzle out. A skilled Wind Wizard ranked higher than Heero could even carry the Lightning back towards Heero's allies. This is the same strength as above just said in a different way. Please add this one to the one above and add a new one here.

Heero himself Can consume Lightning and Wind mixed together in any way, due to being a Hybrid Slayer and knowing Sky Dragon Slayer arts.

Due to being a Dragon Slayer, Heero has motion sickness. Put him on pretty much any mode of transportation and watch him clutch whatever's nearby and pray in fear, panic, and unease if he tries to move he'll just usually freeze up and fall over even more helplessly.

Heero's Lightning spells will never miss homing onto any kind of magical metals, no matter their rank, making him very dangerous and effective against opponents who use the Metal Element; however, you could redirect one of Heero's more powerful spells with a low-ranked Metal effect, leaving him drained of the Magic Power; and you unharmed; he is both effective and ineffective against the Metal element depending on the skill of his opponent.

You are missing 2 more weaknesses here. Your last two strengths can be dropped instead to fix this seeing as they are sort of obvious things.


Passive Abilities:


Dragon Force This is a perk you get for being a Dragon Slayer and does not really count towards your abilities meaning that you can move this to a separate area named something similar like ‘Slayer Perks’ and then you can replace it with another ability.
Lightning Reflexes This buff needs to have a percentage you gain here.
Immense Durability Needs a percentage that you gain. This can be moved to Slayer Perks.
Immense Strength Needs to have a percentage amount that you gain. Can be moved to slayer Perks.
Immense Magic Power output What do you mean by this? Please explain this more.
Heightened Sense of Smell and Awareness This can be moved to Slayer Perks.
Can Eat any Form of Un-mixed Lightning, Un-mixed Lightning Magic, or Electricity This can be moved to Slayer Perks.


Permanent Lineage Passive Abilities & Attributes:


Heero's Strength and Speed are increased to amazing levels. He can perform feats of strength limited only by his willpower and current magic power.
He can run up too 80MPH on the ground alone, all he needs is one step to spring himself into a run.
Heero may Shapeshift into Animals
Heero may still use magic while Shapeshifted.  
Animal Forms last up to 3 posts per shapeshift (4 post cooldown after shapeshift & 3 uses per thread / fight)

Please take this out and replace it with a the entire description for your lineage. This is how we do lineages in magic apps now. Btw your ‘Lightning Dragon’s Mark’ spell has been edited so that it only works with C-rank and lower spells for balancing issues. So please adjust all of your spells that are higher rank than C-rank that have abilities with this spell. Also please separate your durations and your CDs from your weaknesses and strengths that are not actual weaknesses or strengths for their rank which most of your spells are like that. Examples of spells where the duration/CD is a weakness/strength would be something like a spell with a instant duration with a 14 post CD where the CD is a weakness or a 14 post duration with a 15 post CD. The first would be weakness while the latter would be a strength.


Spells:

H-Ranked Spell:

S-Ranked Spells:

A-Ranked Spells:

B-Ranked Spells:

C-Ranked Spells:

D-Ranked Spells:

Spell Temp: