Lione character

Name: Lione Alas (Lio)
Gender: Female
Age: 16
Birthday: 5/20/1995
Sexuality: Straight
Special Characteristics: None

Personality: Her personality is kind and sweet but can turn mean when pushed the wrong way.
Her sweet nature makes people think of her as weak and innocent.
She turns really mean if a person or persons threatens her, her friends or any part of nature.
Only way for her mean side to fade is to see something cute or knocked out cold.
Her most kind nature is shown towards animals mostly rabbits and squirrels that she seems to walk by while on missions.
In battle she is mostly calm and elegant when evading her enemy but if her enemy goes to destroy a ally or nature her mood changes into cold and mean doing everything she can to kill her enemy.
Likes:She likes cute things, nature since she grew up with nature and hanging with her friends.
Dislikes: Bad people who threaten nature, people messing with her friends and dumb people.
Motivations: She follows orders of her leader and protects nature all she can
Fears: She has fear of fire and monsters/ghosts.

General Appearance


Height: She is 5 ft
Weight: 112 lb
Hair: Long green hair reaching down to her waist the front having a strand between her eyes
Eyes: Her eyes are black
Skin Tone: Her skin is light
Appearance: Her body is medium build, seen wearing a shirt that covers around and over her breasts her stomach exposed, wearing green shorts on her legs white long socks covering up to her thighs, short white shoes on her feet, her ears appear pointy.
She is often seen with a rabbit on her shoulder that follows her anywhere she goes.

Guild/Council

Guild: Guildless
Tattoo: None
Rank: D-rank mage

Grammar check, though i am no admin or mod myself I am just trying to help. Some words in your personality seem to be in the wrong tense. "Sense she grow up there" It should be grew up there. Also, try adding in some commas where a pause would be appropriate for breathing, helps break things up. Again just trying to help.

That ok now and no problem i like peoples help.

Your personality can be broken up with some periods you know. That is just one long run on sentence and even though the commas are there it just...is still overwhelming. Also, after "her sweet nature makes people think she is weak" End it there with a period or with a semi collon and either start the next sentence with She can turn or just keep going with " ; she can turn really mean if people threaten her, or her close friends" Then start up on how the only way she can calm down as a new sentence. You got 100 words use them as best as you can.
Other than that it is up to the admins to see if it is good enough to pass or not.

Thanks for doing my job for me, En. ^^;

Do what he said, but also add at least one more 'Like', two more 'Dislikes', and at least one more 'Fear'.

Also fix the capitalization of your 'Sexuality' and 'Special Characteristics'. Could you add at least one more line of 'Appearance'? Please change "5ft" to "5 ft.", and 112lb" to "112 lbs."

And you don't have to break up your 'Personality' into lines... a normal space between sentences will do.

I've been asked to take a look at this.

I'd like you to add more detail in the personality on how your character behaves in battle.

Fixed.

All right, looks good enough.
The only problem that remains is that Eclipse Soul is currently full until all other Guilds are balanced out. Once all Guilds have more or less the same number of members, we'll open them once again.

I heard you're friends with Eclipse and NightDriven so I can imagine you would like to be in the same Guild as them. However, rules are rules. So my suggestion would be to become Guildless until Eclipse Soul has a spot open for you and then get recruited.

Unless you don't mind being in a different Guild that is.

I will remain Guildless for now.

Approved

lol, You should lock it if it's approved man.