Alice Crystals Pet Registration

RogueDoll wrote:Name:Meaki
Species:Lamb Beast
Type: Support pet
Description: appeaerence: browse.devi antart.c om/?q=chibi+mo nster #/d 34whfcShe has a pink face and white whool. She has 4 holves and has little horns on the top oh her heas behind her lamb ears, 2 sharp teath inplave of canines, pink eyes. She is 1 years old and is about 1 foot and 8 inches tall.She can not talk becaue she is still an infant and hasn't learned how to yet. She can walk on her hine legs and can run on all fours. -- Please go over this and check for spelling and grammar as i am not sure what some of this means.
Abilities:

Name: Healers Lulluby
Description: gives a D-rank level heal to Alice, her alies, or alices spirits. Can also prevent slugness, poison, or pralisis for the next turns. -- Spelling and grammar check please
-- Also for how many turns? I'd suggest one or two.
Strengths: partially heals and can prevent certain defaults to alice and her friends. -- I believe you mean defects rather than defaults, but i'd use the word ailments instead
Weaknesses: it is a D-rank heal. And can only prevent D-rank handicaps. -- Saying it is a d rank heal isn't really a weakness.
-- Cannot heal handicaps of above D is though so good job on that
-- I would also like a range for this spell. Suggest 5 meters as its only D rank
-- I would also like a cooldown for this spell. Suggest 2 or 3 posts.

Name: Warriors Lulluby
Description: Gives a D-rank increases the speed of allies and Alices spirits Lasts 4 turnes. -- Again spelling and grammar check please
-- Please specify a range for this.
Strengths: Not only Helps Allies but hurts Enemys. -- How does it hurt enemies. Please specify in the description
--
Weaknesses: Only does D-rank increase, meaning in the bigger picture it doesn't do much. -- This is not really a weakness.
-- What is the cooldown of this ability. I suggest 2 or 3 posts

RogueDoll wrote:Name:Meaki
Species:Lamb Beast
Type: Support pet
Description: appeaerence: browse.devi antart.c om/?q=chibi+mo nster #/d 34whfcShe has a pink face and white whool. She has 4 holves and has little horns on the top oh her head behind her lamb ears, 2 sharp teeth in place of canines, pink eyes. She is 1 years old and is about 1 foot and 8 inches tall.She can not talk becaue she is still an infant and hasn't learned how to yet. She can walk on her hine legs and can run on all fours. Yet prefers to sleep in Alice's backpack. -- Spelling and grammar seems improved, but i'll go over it quickly. Whool should be wooll, holves should be hooves, hine should be hind.
Abilities:

Name: Healers Lullaby
Description: gives a D-rank level heal to Alice, her allies, or alices spirits. Can also prevent d-rank slug ness, poison, or paralysis for the next 3 turns. -- Sluggishness not slug ness.
Strengths: partially heals and can prevent certain defaults to alice and her friends. -- Defaults still makes no sense. Should be defects or ailments
Weaknesses: it is a D-rank heal. And can only prevent D-rank handicaps.


Name: Warriors Lulluby --should be lullaby
Description: Gives a D-rank increases the speed for allies and Alices spirits Lasts 4 turnes.
Strengths: helps support team members.
Weaknesses: Only does D-rank increase, meaning in the bigger picture it doesn't do much. -- [color=teal]This is not really a weakness.