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    Kaito
    Kaito

    Silent Killer


    Silent Killer

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    Lineage : Demonic Mask
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    Posts : 808
    Guild : Bassalisk fang
    Dungeon Tokens : 0
    Age : 21
    Mentor : Marik Anderson
    Experience : 0

    Character Sheet
    First Skill: Demon bird Takeover
    Second Skill: none
    Third Skill:

    Bump my magic

    Post by Kaito 21st November 2014, 9:06 am

    Magic

    Primary Magic: metal Demon Bird Takeover
    Secondary Magic:
    Caster or Holder: Caster/holder
    Description: This form of take over allows the user to take on parts of demon birds even some of the special abilities the demon bird possesses. Some special abilities vary from just talons that are sharp enough to slice through steel as though it was tissues paper to elemental attacks from the take over(s) in use. MY character loves this, because the one thing a cat can't do is have as sharp talons it also gives him interest on more enhancement type abilities like Demon Roc's talons. He also likes intimidation type moves to scare his victims, like Roc's gaze.
    THe second part of this utilizes a metal arm given kaito after a revival of him from a dangerous battle that makes it so his attack have a metal sort of technology to them that helps in battle for dealing damage and unique abilities
    Aura Type: (Locked until B-rank)
    Strengths:-Very versatile
    -Can use devastating combos
    -user can try a variety of kinds of techniques  
    -magic doesn't need certain places to do it

    Weaknesses: -Demon slayers can eat any of the elements used
    -Taking on demon birds can cause changes to the user's personality
    -on all flying spells the hight is limited to the clouds
    -Physically the takeovers can't take much damage since birds are frail creatures
    weak to Holy and water
    Lineage:Demon mask
    Unique Abilities:
    metal enhancer:
    the eye effect:

    Spells:
    Spell Template
    Note: BE SPECIFIC AND ADD DETAILS

    drank spells:
    c-rank spells:



    Last edited by Kaito on 30th July 2015, 5:05 pm; edited 51 times in total


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    my magic Kaito_by_ravenart5-d92uwm8



    Goku
    voiced by whoever plays goku


    what Kaito sounds like

    Kaito for real:
    Tōwa Lazmira
    Tōwa Lazmira

    Judge and jury


    Judge and jury

    Moderator- Knight VIP Status- Regular VIP Status- VIP- Quality Badge Level 1- Magic Application Approved!- Character Application Approved!- Complete Your First Job!- Obtain A Lineage!- Join A Faction!- Weapon of Apocalypse Wielder- Player 
    Lineage : Godchild
    Position : None
    Posts : 782
    Guild : Rune Knights
    Cosmic Coins : 5
    Dungeon Tokens : 0
    Experience : 0

    Character Sheet
    First Skill: Cosmic Mind
    Second Skill:
    Third Skill:

    Bump Re: my magic

    Post by Tōwa Lazmira 21st November 2014, 9:37 am

    Please Clean this app up by removing all unnecessary text, such as other things please also follow the rules here https://www.fairytail-rp.com/t8369-magic-rules. As a D rank please know that you are allowed 4 spells.


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    Towa's Theme:

    Ume's Theme:
    The Blade of War - Unmade Primary Magic - Unmade Secondary Magic
    Unmade Armor - Unmade items.
    Kaito
    Kaito

    Silent Killer


    Silent Killer

    Knight VIP Status- Regular VIP Status- Magic Application Approved!- Character Application Approved!- Obtain A Lineage!- Join A Faction!- Player 
    Lineage : Demonic Mask
    Position : None
    Posts : 808
    Guild : Bassalisk fang
    Dungeon Tokens : 0
    Age : 21
    Mentor : Marik Anderson
    Experience : 0

    Character Sheet
    First Skill: Demon bird Takeover
    Second Skill: none
    Third Skill:

    Bump Re: my magic

    Post by Kaito 21st November 2014, 2:17 pm

    BUMPITY BUMP


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    my magic Kaito_by_ravenart5-d92uwm8



    Goku
    voiced by whoever plays goku


    what Kaito sounds like

    Kaito for real:
    Tōwa Lazmira
    Tōwa Lazmira

    Judge and jury


    Judge and jury

    Moderator- Knight VIP Status- Regular VIP Status- VIP- Quality Badge Level 1- Magic Application Approved!- Character Application Approved!- Complete Your First Job!- Obtain A Lineage!- Join A Faction!- Weapon of Apocalypse Wielder- Player 
    Lineage : Godchild
    Position : None
    Posts : 782
    Guild : Rune Knights
    Cosmic Coins : 5
    Dungeon Tokens : 0
    Experience : 0

    Character Sheet
    First Skill: Cosmic Mind
    Second Skill:
    Third Skill:

    Bump Re: my magic

    Post by Tōwa Lazmira 21st November 2014, 2:19 pm

    Again you have not followed the Proper way of making spells Each spell need 3 strengths and 4 weaknesses as well as Cooldowns and Durations please go ask around in the Cbox for help if you have any more questions


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    Towa's Theme:

    Ume's Theme:
    The Blade of War - Unmade Primary Magic - Unmade Secondary Magic
    Unmade Armor - Unmade items.
    Kaito
    Kaito

    Silent Killer


    Silent Killer

    Knight VIP Status- Regular VIP Status- Magic Application Approved!- Character Application Approved!- Obtain A Lineage!- Join A Faction!- Player 
    Lineage : Demonic Mask
    Position : None
    Posts : 808
    Guild : Bassalisk fang
    Dungeon Tokens : 0
    Age : 21
    Mentor : Marik Anderson
    Experience : 0

    Character Sheet
    First Skill: Demon bird Takeover
    Second Skill: none
    Third Skill:

    Bump Re: my magic

    Post by Kaito 21st November 2014, 2:20 pm

    could you put an example in a different color


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    my magic Kaito_by_ravenart5-d92uwm8



    Goku
    voiced by whoever plays goku


    what Kaito sounds like

    Kaito for real:
    Tōwa Lazmira
    Tōwa Lazmira

    Judge and jury


    Judge and jury

    Moderator- Knight VIP Status- Regular VIP Status- VIP- Quality Badge Level 1- Magic Application Approved!- Character Application Approved!- Complete Your First Job!- Obtain A Lineage!- Join A Faction!- Weapon of Apocalypse Wielder- Player 
    Lineage : Godchild
    Position : None
    Posts : 782
    Guild : Rune Knights
    Cosmic Coins : 5
    Dungeon Tokens : 0
    Experience : 0

    Character Sheet
    First Skill: Cosmic Mind
    Second Skill:
    Third Skill:

    Bump Re: my magic

    Post by Tōwa Lazmira 21st November 2014, 2:21 pm

    This is a spell from my magic please note the way its formated.

    Name: Shinken
    Rank: C-Rank
    Type: Offensive Sword wind
    Description: A Shinken is brought into existence the gives off slight gusts hinting its power over the winds. Deals C-Rank Wind damage.
    SHINKEN:
    Strengths:

    Iaido: The blade is drawn in a horizontal cutting motion causing 2x C-rank Wind damage. This attack cut thought blocks and wind defenses.

    Armour piercing: Reduces armor damage reduction by 50%(If target a has 50% damage reduction the sword drops that to 25% when applying its damage.)

    The weapon itself has no duration(summon cost is immediate and weapon cost nothing from basic use).

    Weaknesses:

    Ethereal: this weapons is unable to block other weapons

    To do another Iaido the blade must be re-sheathed 1 post and let sit for 1 post(2 posts total)

    Does NO damage verses Wind defenses unless a Iaido is preformed.

    Once weapons is released it is unavailable for 3 posts(if the char loses it or is disarmed)


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    Towa's Theme:

    Ume's Theme:
    The Blade of War - Unmade Primary Magic - Unmade Secondary Magic
    Unmade Armor - Unmade items.
    Kaito
    Kaito

    Silent Killer


    Silent Killer

    Knight VIP Status- Regular VIP Status- Magic Application Approved!- Character Application Approved!- Obtain A Lineage!- Join A Faction!- Player 
    Lineage : Demonic Mask
    Position : None
    Posts : 808
    Guild : Bassalisk fang
    Dungeon Tokens : 0
    Age : 21
    Mentor : Marik Anderson
    Experience : 0

    Character Sheet
    First Skill: Demon bird Takeover
    Second Skill: none
    Third Skill:

    Bump Re: my magic

    Post by Kaito 21st November 2014, 2:23 pm

    which of that do I need


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    my magic Kaito_by_ravenart5-d92uwm8



    Goku
    voiced by whoever plays goku


    what Kaito sounds like

    Kaito for real:
    Tōwa Lazmira
    Tōwa Lazmira

    Judge and jury


    Judge and jury

    Moderator- Knight VIP Status- Regular VIP Status- VIP- Quality Badge Level 1- Magic Application Approved!- Character Application Approved!- Complete Your First Job!- Obtain A Lineage!- Join A Faction!- Weapon of Apocalypse Wielder- Player 
    Lineage : Godchild
    Position : None
    Posts : 782
    Guild : Rune Knights
    Cosmic Coins : 5
    Dungeon Tokens : 0
    Experience : 0

    Character Sheet
    First Skill: Cosmic Mind
    Second Skill:
    Third Skill:

    Bump Re: my magic

    Post by Tōwa Lazmira 21st November 2014, 2:23 pm

    every spell needs to follow that format meaning each spell has to have the weakness and strengths, as well as weaknesses and Duration.


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    Towa's Theme:

    Ume's Theme:
    The Blade of War - Unmade Primary Magic - Unmade Secondary Magic
    Unmade Armor - Unmade items.
    Kaito
    Kaito

    Silent Killer


    Silent Killer

    Knight VIP Status- Regular VIP Status- Magic Application Approved!- Character Application Approved!- Obtain A Lineage!- Join A Faction!- Player 
    Lineage : Demonic Mask
    Position : None
    Posts : 808
    Guild : Bassalisk fang
    Dungeon Tokens : 0
    Age : 21
    Mentor : Marik Anderson
    Experience : 0

    Character Sheet
    First Skill: Demon bird Takeover
    Second Skill: none
    Third Skill:

    Bump Re: my magic

    Post by Kaito 21st November 2014, 2:31 pm

    Bumpity Bump


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    my magic Kaito_by_ravenart5-d92uwm8



    Goku
    voiced by whoever plays goku


    what Kaito sounds like

    Kaito for real:
    Tōwa Lazmira
    Tōwa Lazmira

    Judge and jury


    Judge and jury

    Moderator- Knight VIP Status- Regular VIP Status- VIP- Quality Badge Level 1- Magic Application Approved!- Character Application Approved!- Complete Your First Job!- Obtain A Lineage!- Join A Faction!- Weapon of Apocalypse Wielder- Player 
    Lineage : Godchild
    Position : None
    Posts : 782
    Guild : Rune Knights
    Cosmic Coins : 5
    Dungeon Tokens : 0
    Experience : 0

    Character Sheet
    First Skill: Cosmic Mind
    Second Skill:
    Third Skill:

    Bump Re: my magic

    Post by Tōwa Lazmira 21st November 2014, 2:32 pm

    Name: ( Name of the Spell )
    Rank: (What rank is your spell? H, S, A, B, C, or D)
    Type: ( Fire, Water, etc. Offensive, Defensive, Supportive.)
    Description: ( How the spell is cast, what it looks like, what it does, extra info. Make sure to get into detail. You are required to list a given Speed, Range, Area of Effect, and any applicable measurements (such as the size of a created barrier). All of these are as appropriate. Some spells wont have a speed, some wont have an AoE. But include all that apply.)
    Strengths: ( List all the positive aspects of the spell Like above, list all of the strengths of the spell. You must have at least three strengths. Remember to separate each individually and bullet point them.)
    Weaknesses: ( List all the negative aspects of the spell + THE DURATION AND COOLDOWN list all the weaknesses like above as well. You must have at least one more weakness than strengths. Remember to separate them individually and bullet point them.)

    use the Template please. ^^^^^^^^^^^^^


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    Towa's Theme:

    Ume's Theme:
    The Blade of War - Unmade Primary Magic - Unmade Secondary Magic
    Unmade Armor - Unmade items.
    Kaito
    Kaito

    Silent Killer


    Silent Killer

    Knight VIP Status- Regular VIP Status- Magic Application Approved!- Character Application Approved!- Obtain A Lineage!- Join A Faction!- Player 
    Lineage : Demonic Mask
    Position : None
    Posts : 808
    Guild : Bassalisk fang
    Dungeon Tokens : 0
    Age : 21
    Mentor : Marik Anderson
    Experience : 0

    Character Sheet
    First Skill: Demon bird Takeover
    Second Skill: none
    Third Skill:

    Bump Re: my magic

    Post by Kaito 21st November 2014, 2:33 pm

    Im so confused!!!!!!!


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    my magic Kaito_by_ravenart5-d92uwm8



    Goku
    voiced by whoever plays goku


    what Kaito sounds like

    Kaito for real:
    Tōwa Lazmira
    Tōwa Lazmira

    Judge and jury


    Judge and jury

    Moderator- Knight VIP Status- Regular VIP Status- VIP- Quality Badge Level 1- Magic Application Approved!- Character Application Approved!- Complete Your First Job!- Obtain A Lineage!- Join A Faction!- Weapon of Apocalypse Wielder- Player 
    Lineage : Godchild
    Position : None
    Posts : 782
    Guild : Rune Knights
    Cosmic Coins : 5
    Dungeon Tokens : 0
    Experience : 0

    Character Sheet
    First Skill: Cosmic Mind
    Second Skill:
    Third Skill:

    Bump Re: my magic

    Post by Tōwa Lazmira 21st November 2014, 5:25 pm

    Edits are in this color please not that some changes will require you to change up some of the descriptions.

    Kitteh wrote:Magic

    Primary Magic: Demon Bird Takeover
    Secondary Magic:
    Caster or Holder: Caster
    Description: This form of takeover allows the user to take on parts of demon birds even some of the special abilities the demon bird possesses. Some special abilities vary from just talons that are sharp enough to slice through steel as though it was tissues paper to elemental attacks from the take over(s) in use.
    Aura Type: (Locked until B-rank)
    Strengths:
    -Very versatile
    -Can use devastating combos
    -Dragon and god slayers can't eat the elements used
    Weaknesses:
    -Demon slayers can eat any of the elements used
    -Taking on demon birds can cause changes to the user's personality
    -Max of 2 different takeovers can be used at once
    -Physically the takeovers can't take much damage since birds are frail creatures
    (Please not that you are weak against Holy and Water this is because of your strengths.)
    Lineage:
    Unique Abilities:

    Spells:
    Spell Template
    Note: BE SPECIFIC AND ADD DETAILS

    Name: Demon Phoenix Wings
    Rank: D
    Type: Utility,Offense
    Description: This partial takeover allows the user to sprout black flame wings that allow flight and the user to shoot a volley of black flames at a target area. These wings allow a fly speed of at max twenty-five miles per hour. The user can shoot the black flames in a ten foot area, but does run the risk of the flames catching allies in the attack.(You can have the wings or the attack not both.)
    Strengths:
    -Allows flight
    -Can cover a ten foot area in black flames(again Wings or damage not both.)

    -Can't be eaten by dragon or god slayer(s)
    Weaknesses:
    -Can be eaten by fire demon slayer
    -Can be put out by water of same rank or higher(Please note that if your flying you fall)
    -enough water at once can hurt the user(since your strengths are alighned with demons your weak to both Holy and Water. Please note that its a 50% increase in damage from those sources.
    -can be frozen solid(What can? the fire?)
    Duration/Cooldown: Duration: 3 posts/Cooldown: 4 posts(Please note that Cooldown only starts after duration is finished.)

    Name: Demon Roc's Talons
    Rank: D
    Type: Offense
    Description: The user's hands and feet turn bird like with razor sharp talons that are able to slice through steel as if it was a piece of tissue paper. These talons tear through D-rank defenses with ease and do D-rank damage.
    Strengths:
    -Can cut through D-rank defenses with ease(as per Item rules you would only be able to break through weak equipment, please note this.)
    -D-rank slicing damage
    -Can slice through steel like it was tissue paper(redundant please remove and find a new strength.)
    Weaknesses:
    -Can crack if it hits something hard enough(Does this cause damage to the user or just end the spell?)
    -Melee only
    -The talons can get stuck in objects
    -Can be easy to avoid if the enemy figures out the user's movement pattern
    [Duration/Cooldown:[/b] Duration: 4 posts/Cooldown: 5 posts(again please not Cooldown does not start until duration ends.)



    Name: Blue Jay claw
    Rank: D
    Type: Offensive
    Description: User's hand turns into giant Bird talon
    arm grows another 5 inches(Please give more Description)

    Strengths:
    allows double strength(I will allow a 50% boost to strength but not a 100% sorry.)
    pierces armour easily(what does this mean? Does it go through armor better , ignore armor what?
    arm gives more swinging force(redundant Please remove and find another strength)
    Weaknesses:
    Arm is less wide than average and can be cut off easily
    self pain when sharpening talon
    smell and taste of arm attracts dragon slayers(This is a weakness that makes no sense in terms of the site please remove and find another
    [Duration/Cooldown:[/b]
    lasts 2 posts
    4 post cool down(again Note the cooldown does not start until the duration ends.


    List of Spell Fusions:(Locked until B rank)

    Name:Roc's Gaze
    Rank:D
    Type:defensive
    Description:Eagle face up in the sky shows a Beam of light and makes a foot wide Ravine in the ground protecting user(this is confusing please add more Description to make this understandable.
    Strengths:
    opponent could have death by fall(how is this accomplished? and you would not be able to make it deep enough to cause death only D rank damage.)
    provides protection(How does this proctect you?)
    scares opponent(you would only effect D ranks and you need to define how.)
    Weaknesses:
    if opponent is to close it will have no effect(how close?)
    ground appears out of the sky falling on user if not dodged(what?)
    makes a scare appear randomly in the user(You would only be able to scare other D ranks for a post, but you need to define what it does.)
    User can refill(Refill what?)
    Duration Cooldown:
    crack stays forever spell lasts one post
    cooldown 9 posts(this is a bit high)



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    Towa's Theme:

    Ume's Theme:
    The Blade of War - Unmade Primary Magic - Unmade Secondary Magic
    Unmade Armor - Unmade items.
    Kaito
    Kaito

    Silent Killer


    Silent Killer

    Knight VIP Status- Regular VIP Status- Magic Application Approved!- Character Application Approved!- Obtain A Lineage!- Join A Faction!- Player 
    Lineage : Demonic Mask
    Position : None
    Posts : 808
    Guild : Bassalisk fang
    Dungeon Tokens : 0
    Age : 21
    Mentor : Marik Anderson
    Experience : 0

    Character Sheet
    First Skill: Demon bird Takeover
    Second Skill: none
    Third Skill:

    Bump Re: my magic

    Post by Kaito 22nd November 2014, 11:08 am

    bumpsicle


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    my magic Kaito_by_ravenart5-d92uwm8



    Goku
    voiced by whoever plays goku


    what Kaito sounds like

    Kaito for real:
    Godlike Frederik
    Godlike Frederik
    The Forsaken

    Administrator- Moderator- Developer/GFX Artist- Quality Badge Level 1- Quality Badge Level 2- Quality Badge Level 3- 11 Sinner- Veteran Level 2- Veteran Level 1- 1 Year Anniversary- Player 
    Lineage : Apex of Darkness
    Position : None
    Posts : 2972
    Guild : Errings Rising
    Cosmic Coins : 0
    Dungeon Tokens : 0
    Experience : 258,417

    Character Sheet
    First Skill: Plague Craft
    Second Skill:
    Third Skill:

    Bump Re: my magic

    Post by Godlike Frederik 26th November 2014, 11:51 am

    (First of all, resize your forum avatar to the right size. Right now it is to big and intervenes with what you have written. Making it hard for other to read. Also I see that this magic is reviewed several times, and you have ignored some of the comments that were made on your magic.
    So I review this magic only once after your edits, and only when your avatar is the proper size. If I get the feeling that you are toying with me this magic won't be checked again.)


    Magic

    Primary Magic: Demon Bird Takeover
    Secondary Magic:
    Caster or Holder: Caster
    Description: This form of take over allows the user to take on parts of demon birds even some of the special abilities the demon bird possesses. Some special abilities vary from just talons that are sharp enough to slice through steel as though it was tissues paper to elemental attacks from the take over(s) in use.
    (Write a greater description then this, explain where this magic comes from. What does it do? What elements is it aligned with? Why is it a bird take over?)
    Aura Type: (Locked until B-rank)
    Strengths:-Very versatile
    -Can use devastating combos
    -Dragon and god slayers can't eat the elements used (sorry, but elements can be eaten by slayers. Maybe some higher ranked spells can't, but basically most elemental magic can be eaten by all types of slayers.)
    -Demon slayers are the only ones who can eat it

    Weaknesses:
    -Demon slayers can eat any of the elements used
    -Taking on demon birds can cause changes to the user's personality
    -Max of 2 different take overs can be used at once
    -Physically the take overs can't take much damage since birds are frail creatures
    -weak to Holy and water
    Lineage:Demon mask
    Unique Abilities:

    Spells:
    Spell Template
    Note: BE SPECIFIC AND ADD DETAILS

    Name: Demon Phoenix Wings
    Rank: D
    Type: Utility,Offense
    Description: This partial take over allows the user to sprout black flame wings that allows the user to shoot a volley of black flames at a target area. The user can shoot the black flames in a ten foot area, but does run the risk of the flames catching allies in the attack.
    Strengths:
    -doesn't hurt allies
    -Can cover a ten foot area in black flames
    -Can't be eaten by dragon or god slayer(s)
    Weaknesses:-Can be eaten by fire demon slayer
    -Can be put out by water of same rank or higher wich can make fall
    -enough water at once can hurt the user
    -Holy and water hurt user
    -flames can be frozen solid
    Duration/Cooldown: Duration: 3 posts/Cooldown: 4 posts cooldown does not start until duration ends

    Name: Demon Roc's Talons
    Rank: D
    Type: Offense
    Description: The user's hands and feet turn bird like with razor sharp talons that are able to slice through steel as if it was a piece of tissue paper. These talons tear through D-rank defenses with ease and do D-rank damage.
    Strengths:
    -Can cut through small equipment with ease
    -D-rank slicing damage
    -Can slice through steel ad only that type of metal like it was tissue paper (Not necessary, find a new strength for this one)
    Weaknesses:
    -Can crack if it hits something hard enough (define please, like it cracks when hitting armor and defense of an higher rank. Also this would immediate end the spell)
    -Melee only
    -The talons can get stuck in objects (Sure, but what kind of objects? Since you stated earlier it can cut through metal easily? You need a new weakness for this)
    -Can be easy to avoid if the enemy figures out the users's movement pattern
    [Duration/Cooldown:[/b] Duration: 4 posts/Cooldown: 5 posts


    Name: Blue Jay claw
    Rank: D
    Type: Offensive
    Description: User's hand turns into giant Bird talon
    arm grows another 5 inches and gives a length wise thrust when attacking (need more then this, give a proper description for what this attack is used. Like what can you all do with the longer arms, what is the different between the Demon Roc's Talon and this one)
    Strengths:
    allows 50% enhancement
    peirces armour easily (explain in the description, also only armor this work upon is weak armor sets)
    arm proves to be more flexible
    Weaknesses:
    Arm is less wide than average and can be cut off easily
    self pain when sharpening talon
    if you run out of time when someone attacks pain will go to real arm with the same amount of damage(not a weakness since the talons are your real arms. You just extend them and have not proclaimed that they are fake whatsoever, you need a more suitable weakness instead of this)
    [Duration/Cooldown:[/b]
    lasts 2 posts
    4 post cool down



    Name:Roc's Gaze
    Rank:D
    Type:defensive
    Description:Eagle face up in the sky shows a Beam of light and makes a foot wide Ravine in the ground protecting user (to short, explain in more detail what this attack does? So there is an eagle in the sky, how does it get there? Have you shot it up in the air? What does the beam do exactly? How does it protect the user?)
    Strengths:opponent could have death by fall (How it seems that this is for protecting the user? You need a strength this makes sense with the spell)
    provides protection of a giant gap so the opponent cannot get close
    Eagle face causes intimidation (How, explain in the description)
    Weaknesses:
    if opponent is 3 inches it will have no affect (3 inches short? are you fighting leprechauns or something xD, i assume you mean 3 inches close the spell won't have any affect. Meaning that if the enemy is further then that, you are protected from him, please explain more thoroughly)
    ground apears out of the sky from the ravine made falling on user if not dodged (explain)
    User gets nausia (not really necesarry)
    oponents can refill Ravine (please explain more)
    Duration Cooldown:
    crack stays forever spell lasts one post (lasts one post, but explain the forever part)
    cooldown 5 posts cooldown does not start until duration ends


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    Kaito
    Kaito

    Silent Killer


    Silent Killer

    Knight VIP Status- Regular VIP Status- Magic Application Approved!- Character Application Approved!- Obtain A Lineage!- Join A Faction!- Player 
    Lineage : Demonic Mask
    Position : None
    Posts : 808
    Guild : Bassalisk fang
    Dungeon Tokens : 0
    Age : 21
    Mentor : Marik Anderson
    Experience : 0

    Character Sheet
    First Skill: Demon bird Takeover
    Second Skill: none
    Third Skill:

    Bump Re: my magic

    Post by Kaito 2nd December 2014, 5:01 pm

    bump


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    my magic Kaito_by_ravenart5-d92uwm8



    Goku
    voiced by whoever plays goku


    what Kaito sounds like

    Kaito for real:
    Godlike Frederik
    Godlike Frederik
    The Forsaken

    Administrator- Moderator- Developer/GFX Artist- Quality Badge Level 1- Quality Badge Level 2- Quality Badge Level 3- 11 Sinner- Veteran Level 2- Veteran Level 1- 1 Year Anniversary- Player 
    Lineage : Apex of Darkness
    Position : None
    Posts : 2972
    Guild : Errings Rising
    Cosmic Coins : 0
    Dungeon Tokens : 0
    Experience : 258,417

    Character Sheet
    First Skill: Plague Craft
    Second Skill:
    Third Skill:

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    Post by Godlike Frederik 10th December 2014, 7:56 am

    Primary Magic: Demon Bird Takeover
    Secondary Magic:
    Caster or Holder: Caster
    Description: This form of take over allows the user to take on parts of demon birds even some of the special abilities the demon bird possesses. Some special abilities vary from just talons that are sharp enough to slice through steel as though it was tissues paper to elemental attacks from the take over(s) in use. This take over uses a lot of kinds of variety that the users take interest into. People from dark guilds use it to scare people by godlike people from the air. The legal guilds use the power to protect the people they love in there guild.
    This doesn't goes any deeper into your magic. You need to write this out more then that, because all that I know about this magic is still that it is a bird take over, that is very versatile. The fact that dark guilds use it to scare people or legals to protect is a given. So go deeper into your magic, why does your character use bird take over. Does he have any affiliation with birds. What makes is better then other take overs. Try to asses this from multiple angles.

    Name: Demon Roc's Talons
    Rank: D
    Type: Offense
    Description: The user's hands and feet turn bird like with razor sharp talons that are able to slice through steel as if it was a piece of tissue paper. These talons tear through D-rank defenses with ease and do D-rank damage.
    Strengths:-Can cut through small equipment with ease
    -D-rank slicing damage
    -The talons are hard to see and are used like knives (How you're hands and feet physically change into talons, it would be unlikely for other not to notice)
    Weaknesses:
    -Can crack if it hits a defense higher than D rank. (Will crack, not can)
    -Melee only
    -The talons can get stuck in wooden objects (Disregarded what I had commented on before, you stated that it could cut through any metal, so wood which physical integrity is weaker would definitely be shredded to pieces. You need a new weakness for this just as I previously said)
    -Can be easy to avoid if the enemy figures out the users's movement pattern

    [Duration/Cooldown:[/b] Duration: 4 posts/Cooldown: 5 posts cooldown doesnt start until duration ends


    Name:Roc's Gaze
    Rank:D
    Type:defensive
    Description:User shoots a harsh and intimidating Roc face looking as if it would eat you alive up in the sky that shows a Beam of light. The beam of light makes a foot wide Ravine in the ground protecting user. The Ravine itself is 20 feet deep. (better description needed, how does the ravine protect the user. What if it is filled with water and so on. You'll need to explain the purpose of the ravine better, as well as how it protects you.)

    Strengths:
    If the opponent is were the beam is going over the opponent will be teleported along with other ground
    provides protection of a giant gap so the opponent cannot get close ( this doesn't come back in your description, it never states teleporting or how it works on the opponent what so ever. Please describe it into the spell itself. And thoroughly explain it. Because as it is now, I don't really get the teleportation part of the spell)
    Eagle face causes intimidation
    Weaknesses:
    if opponent is 3 inches away it will have no affect ( I asked to have this explained better, you just put the word 'away' between it. I need you to tell me if it means 3 inches away from the user? The Ravine. What if the opponent is standing in those 3 inches?)
    ground apears out of the sky from the ravine made falling on user if not dodged (What? the spell was used to protect you, it never states that ground appears from the sky? Please describe your entire spell better. Because I get the feeling you are adding weaknesses and strengths for the heck of it, and don't give it any proper thought.)
    User gets nightmares of Roc's face after use(explain in the description as well, why does he get nightmares? How is the spell affecting him like that. In fact this isn't that much different then the 'Nausea' weakness you had before)
    oponents can refill Ravine with land used to make it
    Duration Cooldown:
    the crack that was made is like a normal crack and if made unless filled will stay there
    the spell lasts one post though
    cooldown 5 posts cooldown does not start until duration ends


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    Bump Re: my magic

    Post by Kaito 12th December 2014, 5:12 pm

    bump


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    Bump Re: my magic

    Post by Kaito 18th December 2014, 5:49 pm

    BUMP BUMP BUMP BUMP


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    Heavens Empress Daiki
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    Bump Re: my magic

    Post by Heavens Empress Daiki 25th April 2015, 8:53 am

    Moved for Edits


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    Bump Re: my magic

    Post by Kaito 25th April 2015, 9:09 am

    bump


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    Rosetta Crawford
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    Post by Rosetta Crawford 26th April 2015, 4:33 am

    Kitteh wrote:Magic

    Primary Magic: Demon Bird Takeover
    Secondary Magic:
    Caster or Holder: Caster
    Description: This form of take over allows the user to take on parts of demon birds even some of the special abilities the demon bird possesses. Some special abilities vary from just talons that are sharp enough to slice through steel as though it was tissues paper to elemental attacks from the take over(s) in use. MY character loves this, because the one thing a cat can't do is have as sharp talons it also gives him interest on more enhancement type abilities like Demon Roc's talons. He also likes intimidation type moves to scare his victims, like Roc's gaze.
    Aura Type: (Locked until B-rank)
    Strengths:-Very versatile
    -Can use devastating combos
    -user can try a variety of kinds of techniques  
    -magic doesn't need certain places to do it

    Weaknesses: -Demon slayers can eat any of the elements used
    -Taking on demon birds can cause changes to the user's personality
    -Max of 2 different takeovers can be used at once What do you mean with this. Generally you can have four partials at once or one full. This makes it seem like you can have two of any type of takeover
    -Physically the takeovers can't take much damage since birds are frail creatures
    weak to Holy and water
    Lineage:Demon mask
    Unique Abilities:

    Spells:
    Spell Template
    Note: BE SPECIFIC AND ADD DETAILS

    drank spells:


    All partials(which these are) have one active and one passive ability.
    Each of these active abilities must ALSO follow the spell template so durations, cooldowns, strengths and weaknesses.



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    Post by Rosetta Crawford 26th April 2015, 7:41 am

    As this is a takeover your partials (most of your spells) each get 1 passive ability and 1 active ability.

    The active ability has to have strengths and weaknesses.

    AN easy way to do this is to use a template like the following:

    Code:

    [b]Name:[/b]
    [b]Rank:[/b]
    [b]Type:[/b]
    [b]Duration:[/b]
    [b]Cooldown:[/b]
    [b]Description:[/b] This should be purely the description of the takeover itself and not include its abilities
    [b]Strengths:[/b]
    [b]Weaknesses:[/b]
    [b]Abilities:[/b]
    [spoiler=Passive]
    Just details of the passive ability ability here. E.g. Allows the user to move 10% faster
    [/spoiler]
    [spoiler=Active]
    [b]Name:[/b]
    [b]Rank:[/b]
    [b]Type:[/b]
    [b]Duration:[/b]
    [b]Cooldown:[/b]
    [b]Description:[/b] This should be the description of the active ability e.g. your Demon Phoenix's ability to shoot black flames.
    [b]Strengths:[/b]
    [b]Weaknesses:[/b]
    [/spoiler]

    I'm not sure why you are limiting yourself to just using two partials at a time. This is heavily limiting the potential of your takeover.


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    Kaito
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    Bump Re: my magic

    Post by Kaito 26th April 2015, 7:45 am

    changed weakness


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    Post by Rosetta Crawford 26th April 2015, 8:02 am

    You still need to adjust your spells to meet what I have said.


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    Post by Kaito 26th April 2015, 8:58 am

    done


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