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beniscool wrote:Name: ben
Gender: Male
Age: 14
Birthday: 06/22
Sexuality: straight
Special Characteristics:

Personality: He is a great friend to have because he looks after his friends and he is kind, loyal, thoughtful, brave and he will never rest until he gets revenge on those who hurt his friends or family. He has a bad side so if you get on the wrong side he will kill any of his enemies that get too far. He can destroy a house with one finger and he is incredibly hot-headed. Remove the "destroying a house with a finger" thing. You're starting as a D Rank mage afterall. He is usually caring and collective in life. He tends to go out to train on a daily basis and loves to hang out with his loved ones to make them stronger. He is always open minded about thing, he always thinks twice before doing anything stupid. He loves food and he is always looking for love and new friends to protect and treat like family. He has a great sense of humour and he is nearly a genius. He only weak is water and taking his loved one away and last but not least wind. His strengths are ice and fire. The angrier he get the more uncontrollable he fire become. Too much elaboration about your magic's strengths and weaknesses; which is unnecessary. Remove it. So try not to get him mad or else watch your back.
In a battle he will treat the opponents like enemy so that he can just destroy everyone without think twice about killing them. He also keeps his enemy as close as possible. He will respects who that follow him in battle and protect them with all his life no matter what might happen at the end. He always finishes what he started. He will never give up always will be on the right side. To him the only thing important is the good and his friends and family.
He is always loyal to the commanding officer. He will only disobey an order when one of he friend are hurt to bad

  All of these things and more come together to form his core. That of a diligent soldier, always on time and tidy despite appearances but bore scars on both his soul and body. He has a carefree, arrogant attitude that is true to his inner nature, he is teasing and yet at the same time empathetic. While he may appear to be a jerk in his heart he truly does care for people, and would do the right thing when the time comes for it.
When he is in battle though his cockiness shines through, either in taunts or teasing. He enjoys fighting, thrives on it but his recklessness has long since been beaten out of him through constant fights for his life. No matter how arrogant he is, years of serving in the military, receiving rigorous training and near death experiances has seared into him the fact that everyone loses and all it takes is one mistake or overconfidence. This has allowed him to serve as a dependable soldier in the face of danger while his years as an officer class and leader of troops has educated him in the tactics of war and battles.  I don't know why you have divided this personality into four paragraphs and wrote about personality out of battle, then personality within a battle alternatively. It'd be better if you fuse them into just two.
Likes: - woman because are sexy
- dog cause they are loyal
- training cause it improve my fighting abalty Avoid use of first person like "my". Your character is not you.
Dislikes: - enemy because the hate me Same as above.
- cats because you can never predict what they are going to do
- clowns why they all the same enemy What??? Clowns are the same enemy? I don't get it at all. Please elaborate.
Motivations: - looking after his friend and family because he love them
- love because he love all live Maybe you mean love all LIFE? To be honest, even my interpretation doesn't make much sense. Please re-write this with proper grammar.
- food he love eating
Fears: - death he mom and dad dead when he was born
- revenge because someone out to get him
- hate the scare him because he love happiness and he hate people crying
General Appearance
Height: 64 inch
Weight: 112 pounds
Hair: orange spiky
Eyes: blue
Skin Tone: light
Appearance: black tunic with a white belt and saddle wit whit socks, his got orange spiky hair and on rare occupations he wears a tuxedo Elaborate a bit more or just place an image.

Guild/Council

Guild: fairy tail
Tattoo: right arm black
Rank: D

beniscool wrote:Name: ben
Gender: Male
Age: 14
Birthday: 06/22
Sexuality: straight
Special Characteristics:

Personality: He is a great friend to have because he looks after his friends and he is kind, loyal, thoughtful, brave and he will never rest until he gets revenge on those who hurt his friends or family. He has a bad side so if you get on the wrong side he will kill any of his enemies that get too far. He can destroy a house with one finger and he is incredibly hot-headed. He is usually caring and collective in life. He tends to go out to train on a daily basis and loves to hang out with his loved ones to make them stronger. He is always open-minded about thing, he always thinks twice before doing anything stupid. He loves food and he is always looking for love and new friends to protect and treat like family. He has a great sense of humour and he is nearly a genius. Within a battle he will treat the opponents like enemy so that he can just destroy everyone without think twice about killing them. He also keeps his enemy as close as possible. He will respects the one in charge who that follow him in battle and protect them with all his life no matter what might happen at the end. He always finishes what he started. He will never give up always will be on the right side. To him the only thing important is the good and his friends and family. He is always loyal to the commanding officer. He will only disobey an order when one of his friends are hurt too bad.  All of these things and more come together to form his core. That of a diligent soldier, always on time and tidy despite appearances but bore scars on both his soul and body. He has a carefree, arrogant attitude that is true to his inner nature, he is teasing and yet at the same time empathetic. While he may appear to be a jerk in his heart he truly does care for people, and would do the right thing when the time comes for it. When he is in battle though his cockiness shines through, either in taunts or teasing. He enjoys fighting, thrives on it but his recklessness has long since been beaten out of him through constant fights for his life. No matter how arrogant he is, years of serving in the military, receiving rigorous training and near death experiances has seared into him the fact that everyone loses and all it takes is one mistake or overconfidence. This has allowed him to serve as a dependable soldier in the face of danger while his years as an officer class and leader of troops has educated him in the tactics of war and battles. He has always got a smile around friend but just around friends. He got pain within he soul because he think it his fault his parents die. He also hear the torturing scream ever night at the same time
Likes: - woman because are sexy
- Dog because they are loyal
- training cause it improve his fighting ability
Dislikes: - enemy because the hate him - cats because you can never predict what they are going to do
- Clowns he has all way had a fear of clown and there animal abuse
Motivations: - looking after his friend and family because he love them
- love because he love all live thing
- food he love eating
Fears: - death he mom and dad dead when he was born
- revenge because someone out to get him
- hate the scare him because he love happiness and he hate people crying
General Appearance
Height: 64 inch
Weight: 112 pounds
Hair: orange spiky
Eyes: blue
Skin Tone: light
Appearance: black tunic with a white belt and saddle with white socks, his got orange spiky hair and on rare occupations he wears a tuxedo.
http://th06.deviantart.net/fs45/PRE/f/2009/093/7/f/Ichigo_tuxedo_vector_by_owo_by_shrimpy_chan.png
Guild/Council

Guild: fairy tail
Tattoo: right arm black
Rank: D