Kakuma Natilia

Kakuma Natilia wrote:Name: Kakuma Natilia
Gender: Female
Age: 14 but looks 20ish Please explain this... I'm clueless XD
Birthday: Unknown
Sexuality: Bi
Special Characteristics: Fox Ears, Tail, Claws and fangs. Has A different form

Personality:
Grammar fixes are in ()'s usually after the error
Kakuma is a fox spirit as well as a Celestial whom was only recently able to take human form and thus enter the world of Earthland. As she is not form(from) this realm of existence,( . That's a period that this sentence ) Kakuma is often out of place in both mannerisms and clothing, B(b)ut she always leave as(an or you could put "a lasting" for your word count) impression. While not exuberantly outgoing, Kakuma still manages to get what she want(wants), whether its(it's) food or a place to sleep. The reason Kakuma is so quiet is because her master died 1 year ago leaving her alone in this world, and due to the fact that she has only been in earthland(Earthland) for a year and a half she is very much lost in this world and has wandered for the entire time. While she is often dirty and hurt(,) she always manages a gentle smile. Kakuma is not evil but is also not good, she sits happily in the middle willing to make herself happy no matter what.

Kakuma has been fighting alone so long that she really only fight(fights) that way. the(The) concept of working with a team is something that confuses her, as well as the fact that she lack(lacks) any capability to lead,( . not a , ) Tactics are just a word for her. Her version of Tactics(tactics) is(is to) come at the enemy from the side. Kakuma is creative and quite brutal in her attacks,( . not a ,)  add the fact that Humans are a food source for her and(take the and out and put a , there) she can be quite intimidating. While Humans are her food source it not only the body she consumes its(it's also) their soul. Consuming someone(someone's) soul is something she dislikes as it destroys everything they were, are and could have been,(were, are, OR could have been.) In a way(,) removing them from existence(she removes them from existence).

Kakuma's loves or of music, Its the one thing that could save someones life.(Kakuma loves music. It's the one thing that could save someone's life.) while humans are a food source for her she finds that they have many quality's she is fond of like their ability to cook.(humans being a food source has been established. Please place in "Kakuma enjoys humanity to its fullest. The many qualities of humans amaze her.") Kakuma had(has) never had a hot meal before coming to Earthland, but quickly fell in love with it. Kakuma('s) master was a(an) old man whom lived far from the city's(who lived in the country away from highly populated cities.),(take this comma out) while(While) he was a very old mage(,) he had mostly given up that life, but chose to allow Kakuma to give her Key to him. Kakuma is a Celestial spirit who can function without a master(,)] but prefers to have one,( . not ,) while this master is someone she bonds with, Usually a lover but can also be someone whom helped her in a time of need, like the old man did when he found her hurt and starving.(This is a run on sentence, please reword this because there is something missing here. I do not understand where this is going.) When the man died she retrieved her key as well as his other keys, she had in the past a master whom had mistreated her and had thrown her key to the bottom of a lake, when she arrived in Earthland she recovered her key, and started wandering. But in this case she did not wish the spirits to be alone so she took them with her, even though she lacks the means to use them.(This is a run sentence as well. You will probably need to go ahead and work on this too. Mainly because I do not understand the purpose of this part. Most of the time, we put our history back in the history section and we leave STRICTLY use this part of the application for personality only. However, I do understand that history and personality combine to make your character who she is. So specifying how it CHANGED her would help here.)

Likes:

Food: Until entering Earthland all her food came from hunting. This is not a reason why Kakuma would like food. Something like "Until entering Earthland all her food came from hunting. She never knew cooked food could taste so good" then give examples of what kinds if you want.

Clothing: Even though her sense of style far differs from anywhere in Earthland she still loves Clothing. Answer these questions: HOW does new clothing make her feel? Does she jump into piles of clothing when she sees them? There are other questions, but think further about this.

Natural Areas: Being a Spirit aligned with nature she prefers to be in the wilds.

Dislikes:

Citys: They feel dead and lacking natural life.(Cities)

Abandonment: Kakumas experience with the Mage in her past makes her comfort people who need her help.

One last dislike is needed

Motivations:

Finding acceptance: Kakuma wishes to be accepted by someone who will love her.

Food: Simple she loves food. HOW does food motivate her? I know that's a general question, but express how if there is a reward of food at the end of a job. She is likely to complete the mission.

Need another motivation
Fears:

Enslavement: Being a Celestial spirit she has the fear of some mage enslaving her.

Being force to return to the spirit realm. What happened? Why would she not want to in the spirit realm?

Never finding someone to care about what.What? What is what?

General Appearance


Height: 5' 4"
Weight: A girl never tells
Hair: White
Eyes: Yellow
Skin Tone: Pale
Appearance:



Fox Form
Height: 7' 3"
Weight: A girl never tells
Hair: White Fur
Eyes: Yellow
Skin Tone: Pale
Appearance:



Guild/Council

Guild: FT
Tattoo: Shoulder Blue
Rank: D